背景介绍
申请难点
留学规划与提升
申请故事
头脑风暴的初次印象:G同学礼貌谦逊,逻辑性强,认真记录要点,之后提供了丰富的素材。而素材并非越详细越好,优质素材则需重点突出详略得当。针对加州公立体系的大学既要求SOP(目的陈述)又要求PS(个人陈述),我们为她解析了二者的区别和联系,启发她提供了更契合主题的素材。
落笔之前,如何做到开篇新颖、脉络清晰、主题突出却不乏味是理工科文书的关键所在。我们在她的故事中捕捉到一个“温情”的点。
院校解读
留学方案
案例分析
小时候,这位同学跟随爸爸妈妈驾车数个小时从上海回浙江老家看望外婆。长大之后,她见证了杭州湾大桥——跨海大桥中的工程学奇迹带来的便利。文章开篇就此浮现:“外婆桥”拉近了她和外婆的距离,美丽的S曲线蜿蜒海上犹如一条巨龙,彩色栏杆在阳光中绚丽如虹……这座大桥是一切的开始,后来这位同学在密苏里大学习土木工程专深入学习和实践了相关知识和技术,对记忆中的大桥有了更深的认知。另外,我们在SOP中展示专业度不失温情,而在PS中则又阐述了优秀工程师的责任心。几经易稿,尘埃落定,终稿让这位同学赞不绝口!最后,她申请九所学校,悉数录取,荣获大满贯!
GRE305的逆袭之路只是一个缩影。这位同学从国内二本转学到美本,从美本申请到加州大学伯克利分校,并且通过邮件积极沟通争取到主攻土木兼修设计的机会。这位同学折桂名校的故事值得称颂。真可谓:土木界木兰,名校中桂冠!
文书高光段落
When I was a little girl, my parents and I used to visit my maternal grandmother from Shanghai to Zhejiang, a diameter 100-kilometer distance that took us 4-5 hours by car to devour around the Hangzhou Bay. I asked my father why people did not build a bridge across the bay to shorten the distance. That would be a very hard engineering nut to crack, my father’s comment echoed in my mind for many years. However, in 2003, I was surprised to know from the TV news that they planned to build a bright. Five years later when the bridge was completed, my family was very excited to experience this engineering miracle. Although the wind was strong that day, the bridge was strong and steady, stretching a beautiful "S" curve like a Chinese dragon on the sea, with splendid colorful fences like a rainbow.
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