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英文字数过多时，可以怎么删减字数? 除了透过整合句子之外，是否还有其他方法?
Tip # 1: 动词优先（避免名词化）
先看看以下范文:
1. We should take into consideration several factors.
2. He must make a decision about what to do.
3. They gave us information about the new research program.
上方句子在文法上是完全正确，但因为不直接使用动词而选择该动词的名词型而导致字数变多且不够直接与简洁。
1. We should take into consideration several factors. [7个字]
2. He must make a decision about what to do. [9个字]
3. They gave us information about the new research program. [9个字]
红色部分就是名词化，我们可以将这部分直接用一个动词替换，建议写作时多注意句型 。
1. We should consider several factors. [5个字]
2. He must decide about what to do. [7个字]
3. They informed us about the new research program. [8个字]
动词名词化还有另一个缺点就是容易写出被动语态结构：
× The analysis of how X-factor impacts B gene expression was conducted. [11个字]
√ We analyzed X-factor’s impact on B gene expression. [8个字]
利用把名词化转成一个动词，轻轻松松把句子转成主动语态并成功缩减字数。
如果你查找常见的动词名词化，可以发现一个模式。动词使用像是“make”和“take”，动名词（verb + ing），或名词由-tion，-sion，-ment，-ence，和-ance结尾的，很高机率都有一个相对应 动词， 所以当你在修改英文时，利用寻找功能找出这些结尾和动词后修正就行。
什么时候该修改动词名词化？
有时候动词名词化的确是必须或无法避免的，但目前我们是过度使用了。下面我们列出常见的应修正名词化的情况：
1. 无意义动词 + 动词名词形:删除无意义的，将动词名词形转换为主要动词。
o Joe will conduct research on the impact of the recent drought on local wildlife. → Joe will research the recent drought’s impact on local wildlife.
o The board will make a decision next week about whether to accept you next week. → The board will decide next week whether to accept you.
2. 当动词名词形是被动语态结构的主词时：找出真正的主词，并将动词名词形转换为该主题的动词。
o The approval of the plan was given by the committee yesterday. → The committee approved the plan yesterday.
3. 动词名词形两两相接:转化第一个动词名词形为动词，保留第二个或将其转化成疑问子句。
o Their interpretation of the implementation of the institute’s program was insightful. → They insightfully interpreted how the institute implemented its program.
o First was their introduction of their analysis of dreams by the trauma patients. → First, they introduced how they analyzed the trauma patients’ dreams.
4. 当主词中的动词名词形与谓词的动词名词形时:将两个动词名词形转成动词，考量两者的关系并加上合理的连接词(because, when, if, although, even though, despite, etc.)。
o Her understanding of the situation was evidenced by the quitting of her job. → She understood the situation … she quit her job → When she quit her job, she showed she understood the situation.
现在一起来练习今天所学习到的修改技巧。
初阶
1. We made an agreement not to buy the house.
2. They reached the conclusion that we should run a new cohort study.
3. Our review of the test results will begin tomorrow.
进阶
4. The discovery of a new planet by the Frankfurt Observatory excited the scientific community.
5. The failure of the staff to organize the festival properly was a disappointment to us.
6. The undertaking of building the new company was complicated by their lack of experience.
Answer key:
1. We agreed to not buy the house.
2. They concluded that we should run a new cohort study.
3. Starting tomorrow, we will review the test results.
4. The Frankfurt Observatory discovered a new planet, which excited the scientific community.
5. When the staff failed to organize the festival properly, they disappointed us.
6. They lacked experience, which complicated how they built the new company.
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适用学员：
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学习目标：
全面深入认识英语写作的本质;
激活现有语言知识，变被动知识为主动知识;
学会英语思维、锻炼英语逻辑、解决思想、素材欠缺造成的写作困难;适应国外课堂与学术规范。
建立学术语言的读写基础、使书面写作技能得到全面的锻炼并具有一定的规范性意识。课程涉及到比如：双向交流意识的建立、客观性原则、信息的提纯与还原、表达逻辑初步训练、观点的辩护与批驳等多项寓教于乐的写作训练。
课程特色：
学术性：
学术话题材料选取尽量保持专业性、常识性、实用性的兼顾。
趣味性与实用性：
课程素材全部基于国外正规书籍、著作、视频片段，结合图片、音乐、电影剪辑、案例分析等素材，结合老师自身留学海外经验，让学生能够学以致用。
因材施教
根据学生兴趣与特点进行量身定制教学任务量与课堂任务;根据学生真实情况帮助学生进行原创写作或者教师演示写作过程，从零开始，构词造句一段一段最终完成一篇真正意义上的学术论文。也可以根据学生的专业兴趣，选择性的讲解resume，research paper 和presentation方面的内容。
课程时间：
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Contents
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段落的结构和写法：文章的整体性和连续性
Introduction and Paragraph Structure
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支持句的写法, 资源检索，引用系统
Supporting Details，Resource Research and Reference Style
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改述和总结的步骤和写法
Paraphrase and Summary
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从段落到文章
Introduction and Conclusion
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因果论文的结构和写法
Format of Essays: Causes and Effects
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议论文写法
Argumentative Essay
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比较对照文的结构和写法，报告写作
Comparison and Contrast, Report
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方法论
Qualitative and Quantitative Methodology
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学术演讲，发言，以及简历的用途写法
Academic Presentation and CV
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综合练习
Practice, Presentation time and Final Review
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