作为招生官,一天可能看上百份个人陈述(Personal Statement)。如果你的开头是“Ever since I was a child…”,大概率已经被标记为“无聊”了。
招生官最讨厌的3种PS开头:
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陈词滥调型: “从小我就对……充满热情。” —— 每个人都这么说。用具体经历证明热情,而不是宣告热情。
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名人名言型: “正如乔布斯所说……” —— 招生官想看你的思考,不是名人的。
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哲学废话型: “在这个全球化/数字化/快速变化的时代……” —— 太宽泛,没有信息量。
一个立刻能用的开头公式:
具体场景 + 个人行动 + 引发的学术好奇
举例(申请心理学):
差: “Ever since I was a child, I have been fascinated by why people act differently.”
好: “Sitting in the busy Shanghai subway, I noticed that even when seats were available, most standing commuters stared at their phones rather than sit next to a stranger. This simple observation sparked my question: what drives our choice of personal space in public settings?”
核心原则: Show, don‘t tell.(展示,而非告知。)用一个有细节的故事,自然引出你对这个专业领域的思考。
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