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Elizabeth:绘画教会了我...


"Paint this vase before you leave today," my teacher directed as she placed foreign brushes and paints in my hands. I looked at her blankly. Where were the charts of colors and books of techniques? Why was her smile so decidedly encouraging? The sudden expectations made no sense.

 

She smiled. "Don't worry, just paint."

 

In a daze, I assembled my supplies the way the older students did. I was scared. I knew everything but nothing. And even in those first blissful moments of experimentation, it hurt to realize that my painting was all wrong. The gleam of light. The distorted reflection. A thousand details taunted me with their refusal to melt into the glass. The vase was lifeless at best.

 

As the draining hours of work wore on, I began wearing reckless holes in my mixing plate. It was my fourth hour here. Why had I not received even a single piece of guidance?

 

At the peak of my frustration, she finally reentered the studio, yawning with excruciating casualness. I felt myself snap.

 

"I barely know how to hold a brush," I muttered almost aggressively, "how could I possibly have the technique to paint this?"

 

She looked at me with a shocked innocence that only heightened the feeling of abandonment. "What do you mean you don't have the technique?"

 

It was as though she failed to realize I was a complete beginner.

 

And then suddenly she broke into a pitch of urgent obviousness: "What are you doing! Don't you see those details?? There's orange from the wall and light brown from the floor. There's even dark green from that paint box over there. You have to look at the whole picture," she stole a glance at my face of bewilderment, and, sighing, grabbed my paint,stained hand. "Listen, it's not in here," she implored, shaking my captive limb. "It's here." The intensity with which she looked into my eyes was overwhelming.

 

I returned the gaze emptily. Never had I been so confused…

 

But over the years I did begin to see. The shades of red and blue in gray concrete, the tints of Phthalo in summer skies, and winter’s Currelean. It was beautiful and illogical. Black was darker with green and red, and white was never white.

 

I began to study animals. The proportions and fan brush techniques were certainly difficult, but they were the simple part. It was the strategic tints of light and bold color that created life. I would spend hours discovering the exact blue that would make a fish seem on the verge of tears and hours more shaping a deer’s ears to speak of serenity instead of danger.

 

In return for probing into previously ignored details, my canvas and paints opened the world. I began to appreciate the pink kiss of ever-evolving sunsets and the even suppression of melancholy. When my father came home from a business trip, it was no longer a matter of simple happiness, but of fatigue and gladness' underlying shades. The personalities who had once seemed so annoyingly arrogant now turned soft with their complexities of doubt and inspiration. Each mundane scene is as deep and varied as the paint needed to capture it.

 

One day, I will learn to paint people. As I run faster into the heart of art and my love for politics and law, I will learn to see the faces behind each page of cold policy text, the amazing innovation sketched in the tattered Constitution, and the progressiveness living in oak-paneled courts.

 

It won’t be too far. I know that in a few years I will see a thousand more colors than I do today. Yet the most beautiful part about art is that there is no end. No matter how deep I penetrate its shimmering realms, the enigmatic caverns of wonder will stay.

 

# 招生官点评 #

我最喜欢的大学论文从某个时刻开始,最后把那个时刻与世界的更大真相联系起来。在本文中,Elizabeth巧妙地运用了这种结构。

 

本文以对话展开,将读者置于行动的中间。她只分享使场景生动的细节,比如搅拌盘上的洞和老师的哈欠。她跳过了那些会让读者感到厌烦并使一篇短文陷入困境的背景故事和解释。读者留下的感觉就像我们坐在她身边,盯着一个空花瓶和一套颜料,不知道如何开始。

 

SPARC的论文写作方法说,最好的大学论文展示了学生如何做到这五件事中的一件(或多件):抓住机会,克服障碍追求目标,提出重要问题,冒明智的风险,或利用有限的资源创造。这篇文章是“创造”文章的一个很好的例子。然而,它真正的力量在于展示作者如何在挫折和与普遍问题的斗争中追求自己的目标。

 

随着这篇文章从个人的过渡到普遍的,她画花瓶的经历成为了她如何看待世界的隐喻。绘画不仅帮助她欣赏日落中的微妙色彩,还让她明白生活中没有什么是黑白的。这一平行关系尤其适用于将Elizabeth对政治学和艺术的兴趣联系起来。

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