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哈佛校报公布2021哈佛录取er的十篇优秀文书,中国申请者写了什么主题?Part 2

美国本科申请Essay写作需要独特的灵感和思路,因此学生除了要善于观察生活、勤于思考,学习优秀的范文也会有一定的帮助。

 

哈佛校报最近公布了2021年度10篇成功申请到哈佛大学的优秀范文,其中不乏中国学生的范文。同时校报对每篇范文都给出了点评,对于这些文书之所以成为优秀范文指出了其中要害,值得我们学习。



Jiafeng:中国的毛笔字


 

I have a fetish for writing.

 

I’m not talking about crafting prose or verses, or even sentences out of words. But simply constructing letters and characters from strokes of ink gives me immense satisfaction. It’s not quite calligraphy, as I don’t use calligraphic pens or Chinese writing brushes; I prefer it simple, spontaneous, and subconscious. I often find myself crafting characters in the margins of notebooks with a fifty-cent pencil, or tracing letters out of thin air with anything from chopsticks to fingertips.

 

The art of handwriting is a relic in the information era. Why write when one can type? Perhaps the Chinese had an answer before the advent of keyboards. “One’s handwriting,” said the ancient Chinese, “is a painting of one’s mind.” After all, when I practice my handwriting, I am crafting characters.

 

My character.

 

I particularly enjoy meticulously designing a character, stroke by stroke, and eventually building up, letter by letter, to a quote person­alized in my own voice. Every movement of the pen and every drop­let of ink all lead to something profound, as if the arches of every "m" are doorways to revelations. After all, characters are the build­ing blocks of language, and language is the only vehicle through which knowledge unfolds. Thus, in a way, these letters under my pen are themselves representations of knowledge, and the delicate beauty of every letter proves, visually, the intrinsic beauty of know­ing. I suppose handwriting reminds me of my conviction in this vi­sual manner: through learning answers are found, lives enriched, and societies bettered.

 

Moreover, perhaps this strange passion in polishing every single character of a word delineates my dedication to learning, testifies my zeal for my conviction, and sketches a crucial stroke of my character.

 

"We--must--know ... " the mathematician David Hilbert's voice echoes in resolute cursive at the tip of my pen, as he, addressing German scientists in 1930, propounds the goal of modern intellectu­als. My pen firmly nods in agreement with Hilbert, while my mind again fumbles for the path to knowledge.

 

The versatility of handwriting enthralls me. The Chinese devel­oped many styles -- called hands -- of writing. Fittingly, each hand seems to parallel one of my many academic interests. Characters of the Regular Hand (kai shu), a legible script, serve me well during many long hours when I scratch my head and try to prove a mathematical statement rigorously, as the legibility illuminates my logic on paper. Words of the Running Hand (xing shu), a semi-cursive script, are like the passionate words that I speak before a committee of Model United Nations delegates, propounding a decisive course of action: the words, both spoken and written, are swift and coherent but resolute and emphatic. And strokes of the Cursive Hand (cao shu) resemble those sudden artistic sparks when I deliver a line on stage: free spontaneous, but emphatic syllables travel through the lights like rivers of ink flowing on the page.

 

Yet the fact that the three distinctive hands cooperate so seamlessly, fusing together the glorious culture of writing, is perhaps a fable of learning, a testament that the many talents of the Renaissance Man could all be worthwhile for enriching human society. Such is my methodology: just like I organize my different hands into a neat personal style with my fetish for writing, I can unify my broad interests with my passion for learning.

 

“...We -- will -- know!” Hilbert finishes his adage, as I frantically slice an exclamation mark as the final stroke of this painting of my mind.

 

I must know: for knowing, like well-crafted letters, has an inherent beauty and an intrinsic value. I will know: for my versatile interests in academics will flow like my versatile styles of writing.

 

I must know and I will know: for my fetish for writing is a fetish for learning.



# 招生官点评 #

 

Jiafeng的文章成功地运用了笔迹的隐喻,以及巨大的身体满足感,展示了追求知识的无限乐趣。我们可以想象他在笔记本上写满了自发创作的信件。我们看到他用筷子和指尖在空中画汉字。我们了解到,他通过一种艺术表达了他内心深处的自我,这种艺术已经成为信息时代的遗物。当我们窥视他的心灵时,我们了解到了Jiafeng性格的一些基本特征——他无法抑制地被纯学习的复杂美所吸引。

 

Jiafeng接着透露,他的智力追求不是由一种而是由三种中国书法风格形成的,每种风格都反映了他智力成长的独特因素。我们可以看到Jiafeng在数学证明方面的逻辑,在模拟联合国面前演讲时的修辞能力,以及在舞台上发表台词时的即兴火花。他通过写作将这些博学的追求结合起来,向读者表明他的广泛兴趣都是同一发现原则的表达。当读者读完Jiafeng的文章时,他们对他从学习中获得的乐趣毫无疑问——他们已经体验到他在这篇精心构思的个人陈述的每一行中都体现了这种思想庆祝。


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