哈佛校报公布2021哈佛录取er的十篇优秀文书,中国申请者写了什么主题?Part 1
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哈佛校报公布2021哈佛录取er的十篇优秀文书,中国申请者写了什么主题?Part 1
美国本科申请Essay写作需要独特的灵感和思路,因此学生除了要善于观察生活、勤于思考,学习优秀的范文也会有一定的帮助。
哈佛校报最近公布了2021年度10篇成功申请到哈佛大学的优秀范文,其中不乏中国学生的范文。同时校报对每篇范文都给出了点评,对于这些文书之所以成为优秀范文指出了其中要害,值得我们学习。
Abigail:S改变了我的人生
I hate the letter “S”. Of the 164,777 words with “S”, I only grapple with one. To condemn an entire letter because of its use 0.0006% of the time sounds statistically absurd, but that one case changed 100 percent of my life. I used to have two parents, but now I have one, and the “S” in “parents” isn’t going anywhere.
“S” follows me. I can’t get through a day without being reminded that while my friends went out to dinner with their parents, I ate with my parent. As I write this essay, there is a blue line under the word “parent” telling me to check my grammar; even Grammarly assumes that I should have parents, but cancer doesn’t listen to edit suggestions. I won’t claim that my situation is as unique as 1 in 164,777, but it is still an exception to the rule - an outlier. The world isn’t meant for this special case.
The world wouldn’t abandon “S” because of me, so I tried to abandon “S”. I could get away from “S” if I stayed busy; you can’t have dinner with your “parent” (thanks again, Grammarly) if you’re too busy to have family dinner. Any spare time that I had, I filled. I became known as the “busy kid”- the one that everyone always asks, “How do you have time?” Morning meetings, classes, after school meetings, volleyball practice, dance class, rehearsal in Boston, homework, sleep, repeat. Though my specific schedule has changed over time, the busyness has not. I couldn’t fill the loss that “S” left in my life, but I could at least make sure I didn’t have to think about it. There were so many things in my life that I couldn’t control, so I controlled what I could- my schedule. I never succumbed to the stress of potentially over-committing. I thrived. It became a challenge to juggle it all, but I’d soon find a rhythm. But rhythm wasn’t what I wanted. Rhythm may not have an “S”, but “S” sure liked to come by when I was idle. So, I added another ball, and another, and another. Soon I noticed that the same “color” balls kept falling into my hands- theater, academics, politics. I began to want to come into contact with these more and more, so I further narrowed the scope of my color wheel and increased the shades of my primary colors.
Life became easier to juggle, but for the first time, I didn’t add another ball. I found my rhythm, and I embraced it. I stopped running away from a single “S” and began chasing a double “S”- passion. Passion has given me purpose. I was shackled to “S” as I tried to escape the confines of the traditional familial structure. No matter how far I ran, “S” stayed behind me because I kept looking back. I’ve finally learned to move forward instead of away, and it is liberating. “S” got me moving, but it hasn’t kept me going.
I wish I could end here, triumphant and basking in my new inspiration, but life is more convoluted. Motivation is a double edged sword; it keeps me facing forward, but it also keeps me from having to look back. I want to claim that I showed courage in being able to turn from “S”, but I cannot. Motivation is what keeps “S” at bay. I am not perfectly healed, but I am perfect at navigating the best way to heal me. I don’t seek out sadness, so “S” must stay on the sidelines, and until I am completely ready, motivation is more than enough for me.
Abigail的文章探讨了大学申请中最微妙的话题之一:处理个人或家庭悲剧。也许最常见的陷阱是把一个悲剧事件带进太多的悲情和失落感中,这样的叙述除了失落本身之外,就无法揭示作者自身的个性。简言之,这是一个“悲伤的故事”。然而,Abigail的文章巧妙地避开了这一点,利用智慧和使用字母“s”的框架装置,以引人入胜和发人深省的方式分享了一段深刻的个人旅程。
Abigail没有单纯关注父母中一人死于癌症,而是反思了自己的生活以及她不得不做出的调整。特别令人痛心的是,她表达了这样一种感觉:她与仅存一位父母的生活似乎有点反常,不断提醒她其他人的家庭结构是完整的,这让她心神不宁。
让这篇文章更加引人入胜的是,当她学会如何应对损失时,我们是如何瞥见她的内心生活的。这里有一种诚实,她向读者揭示了她试图通过不断忙碌来填补生活中的空白。更令人满意的是,当她发现自己热衷于的事情时,这些致力于各种活动的尝试演变成了她所谓的“双s”或“激情”。也许这篇文章可以通过让读者了解这些激情可能是什么来进一步加强,因为我们可以根据她提到的活动进行推测。
最后,我们在Abigail的结尾反思中看到了现实主义和成熟感。在这样一篇文章的结尾很容易有一种叙事上的完美感,但她明智地承认“生活更复杂”。这一辛酸的启示为我们提供了一扇了解她持续奋斗的窗口,但她在这篇文章中的成长和坦率给我们留下了深刻的印象。
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