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    【本文系转载】 如何打造申请文书

    2015-09-19
                            

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    如何打造申请文书

    You’ve probably heard rumors about the dreaded “college essay” and how much (or how little) it matters in the admissions process. As international students, essays for you will often matter a great deal, because colleges are looking for evidence of strong English and writing skills neces-sary to succeed in their rigorous programs.

     

    你肯定已经久仰申请文书的大名了。而对于录取过程中它究竟能起到多大的作用,好像有点众说纷纭。那么,让我来告诉你——对于国际学生来说,文书是相当重要的!因为,要能真正读得下来一个严格的项目,你的英语能力和写作能力都需要达到相当高的水平;而你的母语又不是英语,所以你就得通过文书来证明给招生办看:瞧,我行的!

     

    The good news is that overcoming dramatic circumstances and/or curing exotic diseases are not prerequisites for admission. The vast majority of successful college essays focus on small, relevant topics or moments, and it might take a few drafts but you’ll be able to produce a strong topic.

     

     

    什么是好的文书呢?非得要克服过一个重大困难、或者斗争过一场重大疾病才能讲出一个打动招生办的故事吗?当然不是!大部分成功的文书都集中精力讲好了一个小故事,通常是和项目相关的某个话题或者某个瞬间。当然,要想找对话题而且写得出色的话,绝对需要很多次的尝试和修改,但是这个方向绝对是没问题的!

     

    A college education is about making connections, e.g. “how does the past affect the present,” and “what can science teach us about art.” These connections are the basis for the problem solving that makes the college environment a richer and more engaging place. The college essay is not only a place to showcase your spelling and grammar, but a chance for you to prove to admissions officers how you make connections.

     

     

    大学教育着重培养的是学生关联分析的思维能力。比方这样一些文书话题:历史如何影响当下科学对于艺术的启示,要分析好,就需要相当强的逻辑功底。申请文书不是为了展现你的语法有多准确、辞藻有多华丽;申请文书是要展现你关联分析的思维能力。

     

    There are three general types of essays:

     

    文书大体分为三类

     

    Personal Statements

     

    个人陈述

     

    These often include general questions about your life, such as:

     

    通常是关于你的生活经历的、概括性很强的话题,比如:

     

    Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?

     

    描述你的一次失败经历。它对你有什么影响,你从中学到了什么?

     

    Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experi-ence there, and why is it meaningful to you?

     

    你曾在哪个地方/环境有过一段引以为豪的经历?你在那里经历了什么,为什么它的意义重大?

     

    It’s important to remember that schools will ask you to keep these to about 2 pages, so don’t address a topic that is too broad. Find something that you can write about with rich, explicit detail.

     

    要注意,大多学校要求的文章长度是2页左右。所以,选题不要过于宽泛,要尽量追求细节翔实、包含丰富的内容。

     

    Supplemental Essays

     

    补充性文书

     

    These essays are often closely tied with the personality of the school. For example, Tufts asks you to “celebrate your nerdy side” and MIT asks you to “show us and/or tell us about something that you have created. This can be, for example, a design, a device, an object, an idea, or con-cept.” Whatever you do, do NOT recycle an essay you wrote for another school. Admissions officers are asking these questions because they want specific answers, and it’s fairly easy to tell if a student is trying to make an essay fit somewhere it doesn’t belong.

     

    不同院校的补充性文书要求通常都不一样,题目会有着很明显的院校印记。比方说,Tufts要求你展现你书呆子气的一面,而MIT要求你告诉我们你自己创造出来的一件东西,可以是一个设计,一个小装置,一个想法,或者一个概念。要注意的一点是,千万不要耍小聪明,不要想着可以写一篇通用的、然后投给很多学校。招生办这些问题都设置得很具体,他们绝对能一眼看出来你是不是写了一篇万金油

     

    “Why I want to Come To Your University” Essays

     

    选校原因陈述

     

    These are basically asking “why are you applying?” This is your chance to prove you’ve done your research by highlighting what is unique about each school. Again, BE SPECIFIC. Saying that a school has “an engineering major” isn’t good enough; find out who is on the faculty, what types of specific programs they offer, and possibly reference successful graduates of the pro-gram who you would like to emulate.

     

    归根结底就是一个问题:你为什么要申请?这篇文章里,你应该要着重强调出每个学校与众不同的亮点,这样才能展现出你的的确确做过功课。同样的,一定要具体化。泛泛而谈这个学校设有工程专业远远不够;你应该要写上教学团队的设置,专业下面具体的项目,甚至寻求到相关校友的推荐。

     

    Show, Don’t Tell

     

    拒绝干巴巴,尽量具体化

     

    Here are a few examples of what I mean when I say, “be specific.”

     

    我说的具体化到底是什么意思呢?下面我举个例子给大家看看。

     

    Not Useful: “I have a very strong passion for medicine. Doctors make the world a better place. I want to make the world a better place. Your school has a strong medical program. Therefore, I am a perfect fit.”

     

    失败:我对医学非常有激情。医生让世界更美好。我想让世界更美好。贵校有一个很强的医学项目。因此,我很适合。

     

    Useful: “Many high schoolers (including myself) have seen the TV show Grey’s Anatomy and want to become doctors. But I asked for Gray’s Anatomy (the book) for my 17th birthday and have volunteered at my local hospital for the past two summers. I am serious about medicine, and from the 300 doctor shadowing opportunities on your campus, I believe you are too.”

     

    成功:很多高中生(包括我在内)都看过《实习医生格蕾》这部电视剧,并且因此立志成为一名医生。但我比其他人更有热情——我十七岁生日要的礼物是《实习医生格蕾》原著这本书;并且在过去的两个夏天里,我都在当地的医院做义工。我对医学很上心,而且从贵校的300个准医生计划来看,我相信贵校也是如此。

     

    See how this “useful” example makes a concrete connection between the applicant’s life and their academic interests? Look for those opportunities, and have fun. I know it might sound strange to ask you to have fun when writing your college essay, but it can help you appear like a stronger candidate if an admissions officer sees you as an individual with passions both inside and outside the classroom.

     

    发现了吗?成功的版本把申请人的过往经历和兴趣追求切实地联系了起来。你们也应该往这个方向多思考。如果你能成功展现出你不仅在课内、而且课外也是一个有激情的人,那么你的竞争力会大大提升。

     

     

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